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A poem about Kingdom Hearts by =Chibi-Mistress:iconChibi-Mistress:

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So lets run like like hell, We'll run away,
Who would miss us anyway.
So pack your bags, we'll never return,
To be free, now, Its our turn.

So we'll catch a train to anywhere,
And take on whatever challenge we dare.
I promise you, I'll never leave,
And we can go anywhere if we believe.

Dragons, Angels and Ghostly hearts,
There's no turning back once the journey starts.
©2007-2008 =Chibi-Mistress
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Submitted: September 13, 2007
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I cant belive i wrote this!! ^^ Im so proud of it! Yeah its just my poem about kingdom hearts

Lol fixed up a couple of typos!! XD

And Now i fix the spelling! Thanks : :iconbenjiih:

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=Benjiih:iconBenjiih: Sep 13, 2007, 4:11:57 AM
It's a wonderful poem, but the fact that it's "Fan-art" ruins it a bit for me. You write well, but there are some typos and lacking apostrophes you might want to correct for it to be perfect.

:D
=Chibi-Mistress:iconChibi-Mistress: Sep 13, 2007, 4:12:52 AM
Thank you! ^^ Also umm whats a apostrophes?? >_<

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=Chibi-Mistress:iconChibi-Mistress: Sep 13, 2007, 4:13:03 AM
OHHH never mind!! XD

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=Benjiih:iconBenjiih: Sep 13, 2007, 4:42:07 AM
Apostrophe -----> '

"Its our turn" should be "it's our turn"
"beilive" should be "believe"

I think that's all. Just minor things that could make the poem seem less good. ^^
*Faroo-the-Owl:iconFaroo-the-Owl: Sep 13, 2007, 5:57:31 AM
cool i can't write poems for crap

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~whY2G:iconwhY2G: Sep 13, 2007, 12:13:56 PM
Really nice poem =D

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=Chibi-Mistress:iconChibi-Mistress: Sep 13, 2007, 1:27:25 PM
Oh thank you! ^^

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=Chibi-Mistress:iconChibi-Mistress: Sep 13, 2007, 1:27:52 PM
I bet you can!! ^^ Give it a try!

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=Chibi-Mistress:iconChibi-Mistress: Sep 13, 2007, 1:33:32 PM
Thanks! ^^

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